From Hayley received in my OCA gmail

First comments from Hayley Lock.

From Hayley received in my OCA gmail (james415039@oca.ac.uk) on 12, Dec 15 and sent at 19.07 10 Dec 15

 

Hi James,

 

I have made a start with your essay but I am keen to get you to consider a few more things in a bid to get this through to the final draft but at present I do have concerns about the standard of your writing and am keen not to let this slip at this stage in your studies. I recognise that you may feel a little thrown by my input at this late stage (apologies if my approach is much different from your previous tutor) but I am keen to help as much as I can in order to support you through this final written submission.

 

I hope you don’t mind but I have a few comments that I feel you should address before you move forward, just to ensure that you are in a reasonable position to submit for formal assessment.

 

Your thoughts on the work of Doig is expressive but the essay title feels like it is in two parts ie you have set two questions initially which in my opinion has made the overall content  overcomplicated. The strongest part for me is the aspect where you discuss symbolism and abstraction in Doig’s painting and I feel that rather than overcomplicate it or to make your essay appear schizophrenic I suggest that you look at other works to back up your argument. I would select perhaps one or two other artists that work symbolically as well as through abstraction.

 

At present you are not writing academically in the third person. You are taking too much time describing yourself and it is important to let you know that you should be taking a step back by writing about the two or more sides of the argument. To help, I suggest you read in more depth about abstraction, reduction and symbolism and bring those readings to your argument also.

 

I have corrected things to make it clearer up to the point when you start to talk about the dog aspect of your essay but feel that you may wish to look at reordering your essay to date so that this aspect is more inclusive to your question/argument. I understand that the dog is symbolic to you but feel that at this stage, this is too specific for your essay.

 

Your referencing is much more improved and is generally cited correctly so this is great, well done with all your efforts and time there!

 

To that effect I am sending you my comments and corrections thus far and would like you to consider my comments carefully before you restructure the content. Try to be less descriptive about the work and more wide reaching in answering the question you have asked. Remember to constantly revert back to your question to make sure you are not going off course in terms of content.

 

Let me know your thoughts on this and who you would like to include (artists) to support your ideas. In regards to time, let me know if you need more time to complete and I can discuss this with OCA.

 

I am happy to have a skype chat with you once you have had time to absorb my comments and if you see it to be of help.

best Wishes

Peter Doig on YouTube

Peter Doig is an easy artist to find on YouTube videos because he is so popular.

I enjoy watching what people have to say about his work. I think one of the reasons why I like what and how he paints is the fact that he is so accessible through video.

Peter Doig on YouTube

 

Shirn Kunsthalle Frakfurt (2009) Petter Doig   Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7XzY3R8bzns (Accessed on 10.12.15)

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Channel 4 News (2013) Peter Doig: famous artists ‘are quickly forgotten’

Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rVzxWFRrYD4 (Accessed on 14.12.15)

 

Foundation Beyeler (2014) Artist Talk: Peter Doig in Conversation with Richard Shiff

Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I3jJ1CoyWLM (Accessed on 13.11.15)

 

Tate (2008) Tate Shots: Peter Doig   Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H2136XuCWx8 (Accessed on 22.11.15)

 

National Museums Liverpool (2015) Artist Peter Doig in his studio   Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbcSAYYoAYw (Accessed on 22.12.15)

 

Foundation Beyeler (2014) Artist Talk with Peter Doig

Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qsUEFkQTyKI (Accessed on 07.11.15)

 

MBAM MMFA (2014) In Conversation with… Peter Doig and Stéphane Aquin

Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hJ64HDOtflc (Accessed on 19.12.15)

 

National Galleries (2013) Peter Doig Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_IKe529_2kM (Accessed on 17.11.15)

 

BAMPFA (2009) Artist and Curator in Conversation: Peter Doig and Heidi Zuckerman Jacobson Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hbr28EeTCq8 (Accessed on 10.12.15)

Louisiana Museum of Modern Art (2015) Peter Doig exhibition at Louisiana Museum of Modern Art Available at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u1eHNIcd6Ew (Accessed on 17.11.15)

There are many videos of artist’s I am interested in. I don’t have a list of them all.

YouTube is one of my first ports of call to access knowledge of a particular artist.

I am jumping on the bandwagon by uploading my own work onto YouTube.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCLjmQVpdF6n65h3zc–vhvw

 

 

 

These are a couple of examples of my own videos made during the period of my course.

In the category of Future Exhibitions I will display my work from my exhibition at the Solaris Centre January 2016.

 

 

Tutor help on Harvard referencing.

Hayley Lock

 

Good evening,

Details will be on the OCA website study guide page ‘Harvard Referencing System’ p. 9:

Works of art, photographs and illustrations can be used within the text. When you include a picture, painting, photograph, diagram, or other image from a source, cite the artist/producer of the work and date in the text in the same way as for other references, and give the full reference to the source in your reference list, according to the type. With visual sources, you should say in your reference list what type of medium or material the artist has used – painting, photograph, sculpture, textile panel, linocut, etc. Include this in square brackets, along with the place of publication or exhibition and the publisher, if relevant. If the work is on permanent display in a gallery, give the place and name of gallery using this format: Artist’s name, initials. (Year) Title of work. [material type] Location: Name of gallery.

 

Formatting work should be presented on A4 white paper, double-spaced with wide margins. The font should be big enough to read without difficulty; 12 point size, for instance. Do not use any form of elaborate font (I would use Times Roman). Number your pages wherever possible and include your name and student number on every page. It is best if you can present your work as if submitting to a publisher; that is, in Manuscript Format, with indented paragraphs, a header or footer to enclose page numbers and centralised headings. Full stops should sit squarely next to the final word in the sentence.

 

Hope this will help.

Best Wishes

Painting 3 Contextual Studies Extended Written Project – Final and Published.

My final extended written project has been a hard slog as I said in my last post in CS part 4.

Now it is a blog I don’t feel so much bogged down although I still have plenty to do in preparing for final assessment. At least I can say the project is in safe hands. It is printed and a copy is uploaded to Google Drive. A copy has been sent to assessment for checking. My project is 44 pages long which will fit in here quit nicely.

How do the painterly realities of Peter Doig and Craig Aitchison adopt symbolic motifs and abstraction and why have they used it in their work?

I thought that if I lay out all the pages it would add to the coherence  and appearance.

You get a gist of the feeling of the essay by looking at the image arrangement that you would probably not have by turning the pages in a book.